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Mike Kelloway

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Mr. Speaker, Procedure · 20 wordsI rise today to honour Fred Courtney of Glace Bay, who passed away last Friday at the age of 90.1Procedure Claims · 94 wordsFred was a hockey legend in Cape Breton. As captain of the 1955-56 Junior Miners, he led his team to a Cape Breton and Maritime championship, earning league MVP.2 His talents drew interest from the New York Rangers and Detroit Red Wings, 3yet Fred chose to stay home and serve his community. Beyond hockey, Fred spent 22 years teaching, 22 more years coaching bantam hockey and over 60 years serving the Salvation Army as Corps Sergeant Major.4 The Glace Bay Minor Hockey Association proudly presents the Fred Courtney trophy each year in his honour.5 The ask · 11 wordsI ask the House to join me in celebrating Fred’s life, Positioning · 7 wordsand what a great life it was, PositioningThanks · 8 wordsand extending our deepest condolences to his family.Thanks

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