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Alex Ruff

185 words · 10 sentences · 12 clauses

Statement grade
A–
Average 85 / 100
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Positioning 19%Claims 51%Reasoning 9%Promise 14%The ask 5%Thanks 2%

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Mr. Speaker, Positioning · 15 wordsI rise today as a plea to the government that we need to do better.Positioning Claims · 73 wordsThis week, Veterans Affairs hosted the long-delayed national Afghanistan war memorial groundbreaking.1 This monument will recognize the commitment and sacrifice of the over 40,000 sailors, soldiers, aviators and special forces operators, along with hundreds of Canadian civilians, who served in Canada’s longest combat mission, 2which was from 2011 to 2014.3 It will serve as an enduring testament to the 158 Canadian Armed Forces personnel and seven Canadian civilians who made the supreme sacrifice.4 Reasoning · 16 wordsIt is on all of us to ensure that they and their families are never forgotten. Positioning · 21 wordsWhere we, and the government, need to improve is in having the Afghan veterans be front and centre with this project.Positioning Claims · 21 wordsUnfortunately, on Monday, this symbolic groundbreaking spent more time focused on the monument itself instead of the veterans and their families. Promise · 26 wordsI am committed to doing what I can to ensure, when this monument is built and officially unveiled in 2028, that Afghan veterans are the focus.5Vague promise The ask · 10 wordsI plea with the Liberal government to do the same. Thanks · 3 wordsLest we forget.Thanks

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