Not graded: a tribute or commemoration is there to honour, not to make a case.
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A score under 50 is red. Choose a measurement to see where it lost points and why; choose it again to clear.
Positioning 12%Claims 30%The ask 25%Thanks 33%
This view breaks the statement into its steps and names what each one does.
Mr. Speaker, Positioning · 15 wordslife changes in a moment.Sometimes that moment means the difference between life and death.PositioningClaims · 38 wordsAuston Pierce, a beloved son, brother, partner, friend and member of this parliamentary community, suffered a life-threatening injury last Friday.1Auston is healing today, thanks to the swift and heroic action of an off-duty Ottawa firefighter, Jason Murray.2The ask · 31 wordsI encourage all Canadians to learn first aid, because one day, they may be the person in the right place at the right time to save someone’s life as Jason did.Thanks · 41 wordsOn behalf of the House, I express our profound gratitude to Jason for being there for Auston in those critical first moments.I am also thankful to all first responders and health care professionals.To Auston, I say Godspeed, dear friend.Thanks