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Frank Caputo

1198 words · 69 sentences · 91 clauses

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Greeting 3%Procedure 5%Thanks 12%Claims 59%Anecdote 13%Reasoning 2%Aside 6%Positioning 1%

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Mr. Speaker, Greeting · 33 wordsit is always a pleasure to rise on behalf of the people of Kamloops—Thompson—Nicola, and it is always a pleasure as well when it is a matter that is close to our hearts.Greeting Procedure · 14 wordsBefore I begin, I want to recognize a very special person from my community.Procedure Thanks · 8 wordsRon Popoff has given so much to Kamloops—Thompson—Nicola.Thanks Claims · 16 wordsFor about 25 years, he coordinated the Hot Nite in the City car show and shine.1Off point Thanks · 14 wordsRon has done so much work. This was a massive event that he led.Thanks Anecdote · 61 wordsIn fact, we had a show and shine for A&W MS day, and he lent me his Ford Mustang, Bullitt edition. I told him I had not driven a stick shift in about 25 years, but he insisted I take his special edition Mustang on the highway and drive it all through Kamloops—Thompson—Nicola that day for multiple sclerosis awareness and fundraising.AnecdoteOff point Thanks · 25 wordsI want to give a very special shout-out to Ron because he has done incredible work. Also doing incredible work in Kamloops—Thompson—Nicola is Kayla Hermiston.Thanks Claims · 28 wordsI worked with Kayla’s dad, Mark Hermiston, when he protected me as a lawyer and prosecutor at the Kamloops courthouse when he was with the BC Sheriff Service.Partly on point Thanks · 33 wordsHere we are talking about jury appreciation week, and it is very appropriate that I recognize him. More important, for the purposes of recognizing people who have contributed lately, is Mark’s daughter, Kayla.Thanks Claims · 21 wordsKayla started the Miles for Smiles project for fundraising for young children who have cancer. She is in her early twenties, Off pointThanks · 13 wordsand I am deeply inspired by Kayla’s commitment to those who have cancer.Thanks Claims · 9 wordsShe put on a bang-up fundraiser recently in Kamloops—Thompson—Nicola, Off pointThanks · 6 wordsand I salute her for that.Thanks Claims · 20 wordsI am not sure how many people in the House have run a jury trial. I have run a few, Procedure · 20 wordsso it is my pleasure to speak about jury duty appreciation week and to endorse the passage of this bill.Procedure Anecdote · 10 wordsI still remember the first jury trial I ever ran.Anecdote Claims · 166 wordsIt was about the homicide of a young woman named Taylor Van Diest.2 Taylor was an 18-year-old who was walking home on Halloween.3 It was about 6:30 p.m. in a small community called Armstrong, 4which is in Kamloops—Shuswap—Central Rockies, about 15 minutes or 20 minutes out of Vernon.5 Taylor was in a costume. She was 18 years old, but she loved Halloween. She was walking home when a sexual predator, someone who her mom said is the face of evil, approached Taylor. I cannot disagree with her mom, Marie Van Diest. We never did find out exactly what happened, but we do know that Taylor said no to this monster’s advances and that he killed her.6 That was my first introduction to the jury system, fighting for the truth in that matter as a junior prosecutor. In fact, I am still occasionally in touch with Marie Van Diest. To this day, I still remember her phone number because this case had such an impact on me. Thanks · 10 wordsThe police did such an amazing job in that case.Thanks Anecdote · 25 wordsIn fact, I told my wife that if something ever happens to me, I want the police who caught Taylor’s killer to investigate the case, AnecdoteThanks · 5 wordsbecause they were that good.Thanks Claims · 100 wordsThey found a tiny bit of DNA under Taylor’s fingernail, which they then connected to an unsolved sex assault, which they solved and thereby found Taylor’s killer.7 I am very happy to say that he was recently denied parole.8 Taylor was killed in, I believe, 2011.9 I remember the jury’s receiving photos from the autopsy but not receiving certain photographs because, frankly, they were just too graphic. Juries, judges and police in our system do not get a choice about what they see, just as somebody who happens upon a scene does not get a choice in what they see. Procedure · 12 wordsOne distinction that I do not think always gets drawn is this: ProcedureClaims · 249 wordsWhen somebody who is dealing with a case, such as in a jury room when juries have exhibits available, they can see those photographs or videos 20, 30 or 40 times. While somebody may see something in person one time, a juror, lawyer or police officer might see something 30, 40 or 50 times. From experience, I can say that seeing the photographs or a video repeatedly can really bring about vicarious trauma. I spoke with someone I know from Kamloops—Thompson—Nicola who told me that after she sat on a jury, she went to the judge and said, “Well, what do we do? We have seen all this traumatic evidence. What do we do?” The judge was seemingly at a loss, because in Canada, up until my colleague from Alberta changed the law with his bill to allow jurors to speak about their experiences to health care professionals such as psychologists or counsellors, it could not be revealed what was said in the jury group.10 Even to this day, people cannot discuss it. When somebody sees something that is traumatic, it can be very difficult because there is nobody to talk to. Even to this day, jurors can talk only to their health care provider.11 They cannot talk to their spouse, partner or friends. This is an area that is unheralded in lots of respects. People also do not know that jurors do not really get paid.12 They just get a small stipend. A small business owner, for instance, Reasoning · 25 wordsor somebody who has employment that does not have a union contract or an employer who is prepared to pay them, is serving the public. Aside · 68 wordsIn the House, we always like to think of ourselves as entering public service when we run. I always thank people I meet who are running for office. I just heard that we have an election coming up in B.C. I will reserve comment on that for another time.14 We also have municipal elections happening in B.C. Thank goodness there is no federal election happening at this time.15AsideOff point Claims · 29 wordsPeople are actually giving a lot of themselves when they are prepared to sit on a jury. My experience is that most people do it and do it happily. Anecdote · 58 wordsMy mom always wanted to sit on a jury. Then I became a prosecutor, and that kind of ended her dream of ever sitting on a jury, because Kamloops is a relatively small town. If someone has the same last name as a prosecutor, they are probably not going to sit on a jury. Instead, she just watched.Anecdote Procedure · 4 wordsI will say this.Procedure Claims · 60 wordsI have seen juries that have sat for three or four days of deliberations, and when we see the jurors, they look like they just want to go to sleep and have a good day off, because they have done a ton of work. People have a right to a jury trial in a certain number of circumstances in Canada, 13Thanks · 11 wordsand I am grateful that people selflessly give what they give.Thanks Procedure · 7 wordsI am happy to support the bill.Procedure Claims · 9 wordsI see my colleague across the way is here. Thanks · 15 wordsI congratulated her outside the chamber, and I thank her for bringing the bill forward.Thanks Positioning · 14 wordsIt is always nice when we have legislation that all parties can get behind.Positioning

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