Analysis · Speech on a bill · beta

Richard Bragdon

1370 words · 78 sentences · 105 clauses

Statement grade
C–
56 / 100, held down by Signal
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Greeting 2%Anecdote 35%Reasoning 13%Positioning 33%The ask 4%Procedure 1%Claims 11%Aside 0%The question 1%

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Mr. Speaker, Greeting · 26 wordsit is an absolute honour to rise in the people’s House again and speak to this important piece of legislation that the government has brought forth.Greeting Anecdote · 299 wordsI would like to begin by reflecting on an old story that I have referenced before but that certainly applies yet again here in the House. There was a father who had two sons, and he challenged them to go to work in his vineyard. He said, “I need you to go out and work on the farm. I have some big tasks ahead.” He commissioned them to go into the field. The first son rose enthusiastically and made a grand proclamation and a great announcement: “That’s a wonderful idea. I’m going to do that right away. You can count on me. I’m going to do that. You don’t have to worry one bit.” He made the grand proclamation, but he did not end up in the field. Then there was the second son who was approached, and he said, “I can’t go. I’m sorry to disappoint you. I can’t go.” However, he got to thinking about it and feeling bad, and he said to himself, “I owe this to my dad. I’m going to go out and work in the field like he asked me to do.” Basically, the conclusion to that story is to ask which son was more pleasing to the father, who had asked them to go out into the vineyard. Well, obviously, it was the second son. Even though his initial response was disappointing and did not rise to the occasion as was expected, the results were outstanding because he went and did what needed to be done and got the job done, whereas the other son made a grand announcement and a tremendous proclamation, got the hopes up of everyone around, sounded like things were going to be wonderful, but the end result was that he did nothing and was a grand disappointment.Anecdote Reasoning · 7 wordsI cannot help but see the correlation.Off point Positioning · 212 wordsOnce again, we are having grand proclamations and excellent announcements: “Don’t you worry. No matter what problem faces this country, you hang on. There will be another announcement within five minutes, and it will be okay.” People will look, and they will ask, “Where is the result?” The answer is, “Oh, don’t you worry. We’re going to come and make another announcement.” There is another announcement, and yet a few months go by, and Canadians wait for the results and do not see any. “But don’t you worry. There’s another proclamation on its way.” They come, and their hearts are filled with anticipation. Much like cotton candy, the announcement provides an instant sugar high and makes us feel good and warm and fuzzy, but then comes the crash of no results and limited outcomes. What Canadians are looking for is tangible results and real outcomes, Partly on pointand I could not help but think about that story as I was preparing my remarks today. Look, these are challenging times, and we all admit that. We want what is best for Canadians, and we want Canada to move forward because Canada is a nation of incredible potential and overwhelmingly abundant blessings that we have both under our feet on our lands and in our people.Positioning Reasoning · 33 wordsWe need to unleash and unlock that potential so Canada can live up to that potential and our people can enjoy the benefits of all those bountiful blessings that we have been given.Partly on point The ask · 24 wordsTherefore, I challenge the government today. With this grand announcement, I hope there is a firm commitment to deliver real results for real Canadians. Positioning · 102 wordsThey are tired of announcements and proclamations and grand theatre and great speeches on big stages. What they want to know is, will this deliver the potential for me to find real work, make a decent paycheque, be able to put groceries on my table, help us make the mortgage payment, keep the vehicle payments up, help our kids get through school and have them actually dream of maybe someday owning a home of their own? If we do not deliver that, we are not living up to our promise and to the expectation that has been made of us by Canadians.PositioningPartly on point Procedure · 17 wordsI have been reflecting on this and looking at some of the announcements that have been made, ProcedureClaims · 20 wordsand it was not long ago that there was yet another grand announcement: “We are forming a special projects office.” Aside · 6 wordsThat sounds great. I love it.Aside Claims · 16 wordsOver 500 announcements have been made and placed under the jurisdiction of the special projects office.1 The question · 12 wordsHowever, I have to ask the House, how many have been approved? Claims · 3 wordsIt is zero.2 Positioning · 44 wordsWe have had 500 announcements, many designations and grand proclamations and yet again the disappointment of no real deliverables. The time for deliverables has come. The time for results has come. We have to get to a place where we are doing real things.PositioningPartly on point Claims · 91 wordsThe good news is that our party has put forward some real, tangible solutions for some of the challenges facing Canada’s industry, workers and people. We are calling for projects to be expedited and to be approved within six months. We are calling for the repeal of job-killing laws and antidevelopment laws, like Bill C-69 and Bill C-48, that impede Canada’s progress. We are also calling for a genuine one-project, one-review approach that would give proponents certainty instead of making them go through multiple layers of endless regulation and red tape. Reasoning · 29 wordsIt is time to unlock our resources and unleash our potential, move beyond the announcement phase and get to the deliverables and results phase. We do that by streamlining. Positioning · 67 wordsWe do that by making sure that this gets done and does not turn into yet another grand announcement that gets our hopes up but does not deliver what Canadians need in this time of stress. We are fighting hard on this side of the House to save people and Canadians money, Partly on pointVague promisebut also to have real projects and real jobs made available and done for Canadians.Positioning Claims · 22 wordsAs we have seen, after a year and a half of announcements, we cannot point to concrete examples of things getting done. Reasoning · 72 wordsNothing leads to more frustration than unmet expectations. When many expectations arise, when rhetoric soars in the moment and when we do not deliver on what we have promised to Canadians, they grow more suspect, more weary and more frustrated. Then they begin to look with a very jaundiced eye at anything that any parliamentarian or politician ever says. Why is that? It is because we have promised much and delivered little. Positioning · 23 wordsWe have to get to the place where we are delivering real, concrete results for Canadians, because this country has unbelievable, incredible potential.PositioningPartly on point Anecdote · 181 wordsI want to conclude with one final analogy from an ancient story that came to me as I was preparing for today. It is a story of a lady who was in a desperate situation and did not know where to turn. She sought solutions from various places. She went to doctor after doctor and could find no help. In fact, she just got further diagnosed, with more diagnoses and more prognoses, and spent more of her hard-earned money, ending up with nothing left in her pocket while living with the consequences of false hopes and many broken promises. The good news is that this story did not end with her in a place of unmet expectation. The good news is that she pressed through the crowds and doubts, and she overcame the obstacles, as many Canadians are doing right now. She sought out a great physician and got her answer. Her answer came when she told her whole story. After she told her story and that great physician heard her story and gave her the answer, she went away whole.AnecdoteOff point Reasoning · 35 wordsCanadians become whole when those who are elected to represent them take the time to hear their stories, and not just hear their stories, but take direct action to bring real solutions to their problems. The ask · 29 wordsIt is time to get beyond the diagnoses in this country, get beyond the announcements, proclamations and false hopes, and deliver real results for real Canadians in real time.Partly on point

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