Not graded: a tribute or commemoration is there to honour, not to make a case.
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Thanks 12%Positioning 20%Claims 54%The ask 13%
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Mr. Speaker, Thanks · 19 wordson Friday, October 16, in Miramichi, we honoured the retirement of Court of King’s Bench Justice Fred Ferguson, KC.1ThanksPositioning · 14 wordsAlthough born in Dalhousie, he has long been regarded as one of our own.PositioningClaims · 19 wordsAfter law school, he worked as a Crown prosecutor for three decades alongside colleagues Jack Walsh and Bill Morrissey.2Positioning · 15 wordsHe prosecuted some of the most serious and widely noted criminal cases in the country.PositioningClaims · 47 wordsAppointed to the provincial court in 2003 and elevated to the King’s Bench in 2008, he is widely respected across Canada for his unmatched knowledge of the criminal law.3He earned a reputation for being approachable by young lawyers and by all those who appeared before him.Positioning · 3 wordsColourful and courageous, PositioningClaims · 20 wordsand sometimes called “the oracle”, he is a devoted husband to Debbie and a proud father to Adam and Jess.The ask · 21 wordsI ask the House to extend its best wishes to Justice Fred Ferguson on a distinguished career and a well-deserved retirement.