“Mr. Speaker, Parks Canada employees from coast to coast to coast are reeling. Two-thirds of them have received notices that their job is on the line and that they should either quit now or wait to be fired later. This puts at risk the statutory responsibility of the minister and the government to maintain our parks for future generations, all to save $145 million. In another category, $2 billion, without batting an eye, goes to U.S. fully owned General Dynamics for military spending. Can the minister defend that she is looking after the statutory responsibility to protect our parks?”
Statement grade
C
The average of Signal, Relevance, Respect and Clarity.
Average 64 / 100
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Claims 55%Positioning 19%Anecdote 16%Promise 10%
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Mr. Speaker, Claims · 58 wordsas I mentioned earlier in question period, Parks Canada is currently modernizing its programs and services to provide the best value to Canadians and to ensure their long-term sustainability.Vague promiseThis transition period will result in adjustments.Partly on pointParks Canada will continue to deliver on its mandate for conservation, for visitor services and for the protection of its assigned places.Positioning · 20 wordsWe all know how important Parks Canada is to all of us and, in fact, to all of our communities.PositioningUnearned certaintyAnecdote · 17 wordsIn my riding of Ottawa Centre, we have the Rideau Canal, which is maintained by Parks Canada.AnecdotePromise · 10 wordsThese are important assets that we will continue to maintain.Partly on point